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把握主线,明确态度,合理创新—高考英语新题型“读后续写”评比有感

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把握主线,明确态度,合理创新

—高考英语新题型“读后续写”评比有感

瑞安五中 张含妮

(发展中心潘云梅按:张含妮老师研究生毕业后从教才一年,却对读后学写的题型有了非常深刻的认识。她仔细研究读后学写篇章的命题特点,亲自动笔撰写文本,并在此基础上续写,在瑞安市高中英语“读后续写”评比中获得了第一名。她的文章处处有伏笔,内容语言连贯,很值得一读。)

 

我参赛文章灵感来自于一首歌同时结合了自己刚参加工作的一些感想。在我看来,读后续写的故事本身应该具有一些矛盾,而这些矛盾是对立统一的。矛盾中间夹杂着次要矛盾,推动着主要矛盾的前进发展,同时,我们要学会从矛盾中看到统一的一面,事物的好坏都是可以相互转化的。因此,我们在挑选续写文章或改编续写文章的时候都要特别注意到文章是否存在一些内在矛盾,文章是否有一些伏笔能够推动这些矛盾的发展。

而我们在给文章续写的时候就要尤其注意文章隐藏的矛盾,以及文章中的一些蛛丝马迹。如我这一篇文章中所写,女主人公的心情是文章的内在矛盾,其中推动这个矛盾的细节有女主人公因为工作熬夜经常迟到,在公司做各种杂事,与男友的意见不合。另一方面,文章中也隐藏着一些积极的伏笔,如新邻居的到来,公交车站台的广告牌等等,甚至是上文提到的一些不好的事情,我们也都可以跟着女主人公心情的变化而看到其积极的一面。因此,我们会发现读后续写其实非常有意思,它考查我们对原文的理解能力,更考验我们的价值观和人生观。我建议我们在写作的时候一定要把握原文最主要的矛盾,仔细琢磨细节,同时要有积极向上的写作方向,尽量让文章呈现出我们励志以及积极向上的一面,唤起改卷人内心的柔软。

另外,我认为我们在续写故事的时候还要注意在文章故事可能性允许的范围内,尽量有一些自己的小创新,尽量不要写别人都能想到的,稍微挖掘一些能与别人不同的点。当然,这样的情节上的小创新还是需要把握好度,决不能让故事朝着不合理的方向发展,我们整体的方向必须是合理的,小细节上可以穿插一些和别人不一样的情节,这样定能让我们的故事在稳中求胜。不过这个建议主要是针对基础比较好并且想进一步提高故事可读性的学生,如果是语言基础较薄弱的学生最好还是以保守为主,写好自己能用的语言,尽量减少语言错误,故事可以相对保守一些。

A Bad Day

阅读下面短文,根据所给情节进行续写,使之构成一个完整的故事。

It was really a bad day. Mary was late for work and was being warned by her manager again. She went to bed at midnight last night because she had to finish her work. No, actually it was not her task but her colleague’s. After graduating from college last month, she was admitted into a decent company, which made her overjoyed for a week. She had been imagining her sitting in a large and bright office as a white collar.

      However, life was totally different. She had to do all the trifle in the office, such as making coffee, copying files, serving all the people in the office. Sometimes, she even had to help others finish their work and she couldn’t refuse for she was a freshman. She was so tired that she even didn’t want to answer the phone call from her boyfriend in another city because he was always complaining and persuading her to come to his city.

      Thank god, she finished the work before ten today. She looked around the office and found she was alone. Tired and hungry, she got off the bus. Suddenly, a new billboard at the bus stop attracted her attention. There was a girl sitting on a bench with a book in her hand. It was sort of her dream now to have some free time and enjoy life. This picture made her sad. She couldn’t help taking out a pen and then she drew a large piece of dark cloud and heavy rain on it. It was just like my life now, she thought.

      She walked into her apartment. There was some noise coming from her next door which had been vacant for a long time. It seemed she would have a new neighbor. But she was not in the mood of meeting a new neighbor now. All that she wanted to do was to eat, shower and sleep.

      Oh, no, she forgot to set the alarm and overslept again. “I am late again! It must be another bad day!” she screamed loudly.

注意:1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右;

      2. 应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;

      3. 续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已经为你写好;

      4. 续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。

She ran out of her room in a hurry and her another bad day began. She was busy in the office, doing all the trifle as usual. However, she had no idea what she had done during her work. “It was really another bad day.” She thought. She felt frustrated that she couldn’t do what she liked to do. It was so hard to be a freshman. She thought maybe it was time to give up when she got off the bus. Glancing at the billboard, she suddenly couldn’t move her eyes away.

To her amazement, someone had painted a red umbrella for the girl on the billboard. She stared at the picture for a long time. The red umbrella protected the girl from the heavy rain she had drawn before. Her mood changed magically. She felt cheered up by the umbrella which seemed lit up her sky. She walked happily into her apartment and warmly greeted her new neighbor. She began to look forward to the day when she would have a real job in the office. Sometimes, we feel our passion has gone away, but we need to carry on because it’s just a bad day not a bad life.

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